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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:13 am
by Karilyn
Ame no Akai wrote:To be honest, a daring escape from a hospital by a dude with an abdominal infection, a paraplegic and a blind guy is pretty cool.
This part made the whole story worth the read.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:17 am
by Fooflyer
What Crawfish said. I liked the story, just didn't find the humour.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:19 am
by Karilyn
It is now that psycho nurse plays her hand. She points at my friend. The fans are struggling to cope. They sense the shit about to come. I am desperate to defuse the situation. I consider over-over drive for a third time. My displaced kidney has no exit strategy. My brain is in my lung. My lung. There is nothing I can do.

The following statement - reproduced word for word; profanity included - marks the moment in time the fans stopped spinning.

“You; get out. You’re in my fucking hospital and you do what I say. This is plain madness.”

I look at my friend. I know what is coming. From beyond the grave, Miss Portman bows her head. I will need her strength.

“MADNESS?.”

My friend tilts his head towards psycho nurse. His voice is bellowing. It echoes out into the hallway. If God didn’t know I was here before, he does now.

"NO."

Psycho nurse is taken aback. Fleeting silence fills the room.

“THIS. IS. SPARTAAA!”

Psycho nurse looks to him, and then to me. Her mouth is open. There is outrage and confusion in her eyes. I think I want to die.

My friend laughs and walks out the door.

“Don’t go flying away on that thing yeah?”

Psycho nurse looks at the broom in her hands as my friend disappears around the corner. My McDonalds bag falls on the floor.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:20 am
by Fooflyer
Alright, you got me there. I didn't read that much into it, admittedly

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:21 am
by Karilyn
I guessed as much. It definitely gets better the farther it goes.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:25 am
by Hoshika-Pichu
Karilyn wrote:I guessed as much. It definitely gets better the farther it goes.
At first I thought that sentence would sound better as
Karilyn wrote:I guessed as much. It definitely gets better the farther in it goes.
But then I remembered the top of this page.

Also hospitals are evil and that story is cool.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 3:31 am
by Doormaster
I loved the part about the guy with bags under his eyes.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 4:31 pm
by Randomdog
This is the most fantastic thing ever. That is all.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 4:51 pm
by DoNotDelete
I got bored of it after the first few paragraphs, it became a bit too predictable.

Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 5:25 pm
by Crawfish
I think this could make a fun indie movie.

I'd watch it.

Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:30 pm
by [Insert Fail]
Best thing to wake up to this morning.

Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:42 pm
by Zang
I think it's safe to say God is winning

Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:43 pm
by Tall-Hatted Yanimae
SO FAR.

Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 9:02 pm
by Bill Nye the Science Guy
read the rest of it there is more he finished it